The fireworker makers daughter By Josh 4DM
November 6, 2009 by year4
We thought about what was going to happen next in the story The fireworks makers daughter.I thought………
The boat was rocking from side to side, Lila only had few seconds to think. She had it. “I have got it” she screamed in her head. She started thinking if it will work and how RUBBISH those pirates were. “We’ve got you now” the captain giggled. When Lila got near the oars she pushed them in very carefully. Two gone, two to go. She pushed the last oar in and said nervously, “your oars are floating away.” They all ran to the other side, splash, splash, splash ,SPLASH. They had all fallen in. By the time they had all fallen in the boat was getting closer and closer to the bank of the croco river, so she jumped onto the shore and ran away.
Wow, what a great new section to the story. I love the way you have thought about the characterisation.
great!we have read it all know in 4BH so its a good story.
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I really enjoyed reading the paragraph on the fireworkers daughter. It was also fantastic to see all the hard work that you were doing on the rainforest today during my visit. It is clear that you are all really enjoying the work and highlighting the issues in its destruction Keep up the good work and you should all be really proud.
I teach reception in a school in rochdale, and it is lovely to read your writing because i don’t get to read long and exciting stories very often! I have been visiting your school today and i would like to pass on my admiration of how hard you all work and the wonderful things that you create. I love your blogging and am excited to go back to my school and try some out.
Thank you so much for the comments .thats one of the reasons I love chorlton park the ICT is great!!!!!!!